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The Heart of a Fool (4 Chambers)

Posted by NWSO • April 29, 2009 • Printer-friendly

PRELUDE: Last Wednesday I tried something a little different with the story of “The Girl and the Sand Castle.” Since that went over really well and I feel like expressing myself differently, I figured I’d switch things up once again. Let me know if y’all can relate to this one.

This is the story of a foolish young boy
As a child, he learned that his heart contained 4 chambers
So as a man, he saw fit to use each one of them
Hastily, he tried to fill the various voids in his heart with 4 separate lovers
However, the heart isn’t constructed to hold that much weight
God never intended for it to be misused in such a manner
Foolish young boy, so much to learn

Secretively, the foolish young boy moved from chamber 2 chamber
Careful to close each door behind him
“The Others” were unaware of his movements
But the heart beats constantly and its rhythm picks up without warning
So he often found himself caught up in a stream of emotion that no single door could contain
Still, try as he may
He shuttled women from one chamber to the next in a perpetual dance of lies and deceit
Foolish young boy, the dark always comes to the light

Boom! Boom! Boom!
Was the sound of a knock across one door
Boom! Boom! Boom!
Another door opened
The foolish young boy scurried to the next chamber, careful not to be seen
Time and time again he performed this juggling act
But the more of himself he gave, the more his blood thinned
The more the rooms continued to spin
The more he dug a hole of futility
Foolish young boy, pack light for the lonely trip

Some called him heartless
Some called him cold
Maybe they were all right
Because a man with no heart has no passion
No fire
But a man whose heart is consumed with lust and greed is just as useless
Foolish young boy, time is not on your side

As the foolish young boy’s heart was tread upon by countless high-heeled vixens
Each chamber became worn down
The hinges on the doors unclasped
The locks disintegrated from overuse
Until all that remained was a bloody mess
His heart contained 4 chambers, but now they were all empty
Foolish young boy, you reap what you sow

Fin.

What do you guys think is the lesson to be learned from this story? How does this relate to the way some people approach relationships? How many foolish young boys/girls have you come across in your life? How do you deal with foolish young boys/girls?

Speak your piece…

Tagged as: fool, matters of the heart, poetry, prose, Relationships/Sex

Neska

You gotta be careful who you share your heart and your body with. It's a gift that should be earned instead of a tool used to manipulate others, cause after a while the tool becomes tired and all your left with is a bloody mess. Dealt with one foolish boy and that was more than enough for me so now I do my best to stay away from them lest they suck me into their game.
blkchk

Seems like the foolish young boy had four women. one in each of the chambers in his heart. It became increasingly difficult for him to keep the women/chambers separate. It weighed him down and was slowly killing him. But he wouldn't stop. In the end everything came out... he was exposed. Now he is alone.
Simoneis2good4u

@ Neska - well said.

I try to stay clear of little boys with little minds.
Geoforie

He made the mistake of assuming his single heart could sustain four relationships, instead of enhancing the relationship with the various attributes of his heart.
VirgoVida

I'm a little confused by the whole thing, but I think that you're trying to say that you can't spread yourself too thin and give your heart to everybody. It's not built to handle that.

Pack Light? Naked, U were on your Cheech N Chong meets Badu with this one! lol. But I still liked the post.
da ThRONe

I thought the point of this was a lot more obvious then the other one. But I'll go a lil deeper with it. I think it speaks to the ideal that men kinda feel like they have a right to date more then one woman. Most dude that I know that juggle women not only think that its ok but they think its somehow there duty as a man to do so. Not so much as they're just heartless as they dont realize that that S.O.'s arent designed to be split between people. Just because you can fit some extra S.O.'s in your life doesnt mean they should be there. If your relationship is healthy there should be no space for anybody else.
Anonymous

I think this says a lot! Before I fell in love with that one that to me was special, I too used the many rooms of my heart to accomodate the different dudes I use to talk to. Maybe trying to make myself complete! As I am sure many of us have. But when I realized that the "special cat" who held my whole heart only gave forth "a chamber" for me...my heart was crushed, but not destroyed! And yeah, it leaves you alone and vulnerable. But until you truly understand to love yourself, you can not love others!
BlackDreams

I felt sorry for the little boy at the end. I feel that he ended up like many men often do, Jaded. The problem with this is that they probably have come across a few of those gurls that could have filled all four of those chambers. But they never gave them the chance. The worse problem ensues however when they find one of those gurls and they try there hardest, to fill all of those chambers only to be hurt themselves... Which ends up jading the gurl. Continuing on a cycle that could potentially be very circular and lead to unhappiness and brokeness on a continual basis for both parties...
BlackDreams

How do you deal with them you ask? Like I mentioned, you stick with it. Being careful to guard your heart, but not like the gurl in the sand castle story so that no one may reach, but with give and take. Like the gurl was so afraid of, building up the wall, letting the sand take it down (learning from your experiences) but then taking care to make sure that in the constant rebuilding of the walls make sure to leave room for someone else to come in to come in... hmm the metaphors are taking a toll... in this one but hopefully my point was not lost..
http://www.brandeeyounger.com Brandee

I don't even want to read it! I know way too many cheating fools.
paulettebajangal

There's no need for cheating.The boy should just have a sign saying "Open House" and invite each lady to a couch in each room...making it very clear he's not looking for just one accupant at the moment. Then they could've decided for themselves if they wanted roommates.

Cause pretending to want a monogamous relationship when you don't is worse than seeing a few people at the same time with clear communication.
DefCon4

Sand Castles + Cheating = The vicious cycle our generation keeps perpetuating.

I truly appreciate you putting these issues out there for people to discuss. If we can change the language, we change our lives.
DefCon4

@ Paulettebajangal

THANK YOU. PERFECTLY SAID.
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@ Virgo

I don't get the Cheech N Chong reference.

**lost**
VirgoVida

You know these posts are brand new to us. Your letting your creative juices flow and test them out on us. Who's more creative and metaphoric than a stoner? lol.
Erykah Badu's bag lady states that we should pack light. So when I read this, it made me feel like you channeled Cheech N Chong, Erykah Badu, and a bong with a peace symbol on it!

If you still don't get it, I warned you, sometimes Virgos go in waaaaay too deep! LLS
blkchk

lol @ virgo... I TOO AM A DEEP THINKIN VIRGO! oh, and a metaphoric stoner... lmao ;-0 lol
VirgoVida

@ blkchk
It's the best of both worlds! I keep trying to tell the world, but they won't listen.

Da throne, blkchk, and me...watch out, the virgos are in da building.......
*Cue the clanking bottles from the Flava in Ya Ear Remix NOW*
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@ Virgo

don't smoke so your thought process went way over my head...

and you know your proper reference to the clanking bottles should have gone to the original scene from "Warriors" which Mr. Combs jacked.

Kids today, always forgetting their history...

SMH
mine jaz

@ all the green thinkers.. i LOVE YOU! thanks to Neska and Da throne thanks for breaking it down for me.. i agree to a certain extint... i do think that there are hidden little nooks and crannies for those previous loves or loves u never quite let go because u cant and its unfair too.. i plan on filling my whole heart with love! every part! so yea it was wrong for him to have 4 females at a time but its not wrong to love more than one person ..atleast for a time
VirgoVida

@ NWSO

Sorry, I thought I was up on my steez. And to think, my facebook update for today reads "Respect your elders and long live da WU" with a link to Raekwon's new song-NEW WU!
Back to the drawing board....lmao.
da ThRONe

VIRGOOOOOOOOOS COME OUT AND PLAYYYYY!
LL

I don't any lesson will be learned......

I know some foolish little boys, or at least I used to and the only thing that ever comes from this is that they reload on 4 more later on to continue the cycle with.

That is until age catches up with them and they can no longer keep the same pace.
jlyn

Quite frankly, the issue here is truth and understanding, which clearly this man lacked. The guy was working against his nature - beliefs and issues he incured as a child and did everything he could to retain as an adult Sadly, he failed to be honest as to why he is the way he is with the people he was involved with which is the core of his problem, NOT the fact that he sought happiness the best way he knew how. It's so easy to label what we don't understand as morally wrong when everyone make mistakes, none worse than another (a sin is a sin right?) ..... we're all tainted. Still, I want to believe 2 people can be together and that be it, but honestly, there is no one person that can make you feel like another and therefore, no 1 man OR woman can adhere to all your emotions for a lifespan; it's just what we've forced ourselves to do...ahhh relationships
Ms P

I think this is what happens when you start to deceive, and/or become greedy. It is so true that what you do in the dark, will surely come to the light. As for the ending, well karma is a b^&*h...;0
Meazyneezy

this sounds like the story of my love life and the reason why i stopped cheating it becomes difficult after a while like they say theres but so much you could get away with until you get caught and once you get caught its always the one you care about the most that finds out its just a whirl wind of headaches and not worth it
bogart4017

Sounds like some of the oldtime players i used to know back in the 70's. You know, before aids, when it was hip to run from woman to woman keeping as many as possible on a string and in the dark. Things are more interesting now that women have stopped all that sleeping!!
Soleil

Thanks for your honesty. Now clear out all of those chambers and delve into the depths for your inner life. All of that self-created noise is probably a distraction from the real turmoil. Mommy and daddy and me..what happened? Start there...
Righteous Mama

Nicely done.

The lesson to the story should be, just because you can do something doesn't mean you should. Dating more than one person at a time is fine as long as its done with honesty and not leading people on. Once feelings are involved it always gets complicated and how you treat people will ALWAYS come back at you. It's just karma. That's why I treat people right!

I can relate to feeling like you need more than one person. I don't think I'm a complicated person but there hasn't been a man in years who can set off fireworks in my mind, body and spirit. Usually they spark only one of three (two if I'm lucky) so lately I've def had a man for each chamber of my heart. It's funny how unfufilling that can feel after a while.

Most times, it's easy to walk away from foolish young boys. But there was one...there's always one...who I just let do as he pleased. He had the fireworks of the body DOWN. But the rest of chambers? He didn't seem that interested in. Sometimes he did, sometimes he didn't. When it got to hard to try to figure him out, I just decided to accept him as is and hoped he'd accept me to. I saw us as two people just tryna figure out this thing called life and keeping each other company for the ride.

You can't deny what you need and what you like. I need a man that's on my level intellectually, culturally, spiritually and sexually. I hope he's out there. But in the meantime, I prefer to stay single until I meet the one that matches me completely. Sometimes I think I want something I'm never going to get. (I have to try harder not to think negatively)

I know so many people that struggle with being faithful for one reason or another. Are they insatiable or just greedy? I think monogamy is truly difficult for some people. Some folks just aren't cut out for it but I'm ready for the real deal.
http://hubpages.com/profile/Single+Mama SingleMama

ha! i know way too many foolish/selfish men. it's so sad. i still have hope though.